Your notebooks and a pen.
1/6/20 Page ? “Paragraph Edits”
- Review schedule through finals
- Go over how to edit paragraphs in class
For example, Lakshmi had to make many adjustments to her life and adapt as she made her journey to Happiness House. Lakshmi has to travel across the country and into a new one with people she did not know and has to lie that she is a random man’s wife (McCormick 56). Lakshmi has to trust the people she is traveling with as she has no other choice. Lakshmi adjusts to doing as she is told in order to continue to survive and hopefully arrive safe at her destination. Another piece of evidence. Another piece of commentary.
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For example, Lakshmi is forced to travel in order for others to earn money. Lakshmi has to travel across the country and into a new one with some random strangers and has to lie that she is a random man’s wife (McCormick 89). Uncle Husband will exploit anyone he sees fit in order to earn money. Most people would not exploit others to the tune of prostitution to make a quick dollar. DIFFERENT EVIDENCE. COMMENTARY.
In this illustration, Lakshmi has to experience some offsetting events to help her family financially. Lakshmi believes that she will provide her family with money by working as a maid, even though the reader understands she is being sold into prostitution (McCormick 104). Lakshmi sacrifices her education, her way of life, and her comfortable circumstances for the purpose of helping her family earn money. She is leaving everything she knows behind. . DIFFERENT EVIDENCE. COMMENTARY.
In Sold Patricia McCormick, establishes a young Nepali girl being sold into prostitution to reveal the theme that one can be manipulated into doing things they don’t want to do.
For example, Uncle Husband constantly manipulates Lakshmi into behaving in ways she normally would not. For instance, Uncle Husband says to Lakshmi, “‘From now on, I will be your uncle. But you must call me husband. Do you understand?’” (McCormick 76). Based on the information in the text, in order for Lakshmi and Uncle Husband to cross the border, they must say they are married. Uncle Husband tells Lakshmi to lie and he himself lies to her about where they are going or what they are doing, so that Lakshmi believes she is safe. Also, Lakshmi states “Uncle says I have done well, and he gives me a handful of sweets” (McCormick 80). This demonstrates, that Uncle Husband portrays himself as the good guy in Lakshmi’s eyes. He persuades Lakshmi into lying and then rewards her, making her think she did as needed and he’s her protector.
In Sold, Patricia McCormick presents a young girl that is sold into sex trafficking to reveal the theme that harming a person that isn’t you, can lead to self-harm.
For example, Mumtaz constantly harmed Lakshmi at Happiness House. Mumtaz tells Lakshmi she can either work or starve (McCormick 97). This unwillingness to work eventually impacts Mumtaz’s ability to make money of of her purchase, Lakshmi. Eventually, this poor treatment leads to a complete loss on her investment due to Lakshmi gathering the courage to escape.
People’s beliefs can alter the way they live life is demonstrated by Antonio’s family. Throughout the story we can see that Antonio’s family is very religious because as Antonio’s mother makes the sign of the cross, he prayed for Eugene (Anaya 75). Here, the family relies on religion to save Eugene, and nothing else including seeking further medical attention. Furthermore, it becomes evident that Antonio’s family believes in Ultima, including when she saved Lucas with her medicine that she prepared (Anaya 67). People are saved in this novel because they put their destiny in Ultima’s hands. Lucas believed so fiercely that Ultima could help, that somehow she did.
In Bless Me Ultima, Rudolfo Anaya presents the life of a young boy who lives his life based off his parent’s dreams and expectations to establish the theme that it is important to have moral and decisive independence.
Having moral freedom and making independent decisions is demonstrated by how Antonio’s parents do not allow him to make those choices and reaps consequences thereof. The Lunas want him to be a priest or a farmer, but his heritage informs him of his vaquero roots (Anaya 667). Antonio is left grappling with his familial and inherited expectations which causes him to question who he really is an what he really wants. He finds himself becoming more resilient to others’ impressions of himself and begins to grow his own identity as a result of the choices he has made.
For example, Uncle Husband often manipulates Lakshmi into behavior she would not normally engage in. For instance, Uncle Husband demands, “‘From now on, I will be your uncle. But you must call me husband. Do you understand?’” (McCormick 76). Uncle Husband demonstrates to Lakshmi how simple it is to lie to someone to get your way, and they will believe you. Additionally, after crossing the border Uncle gives Lakshmi a handful of sweets and states how well she has done (McCormick 80). The giving of sweets convinces Lakshmi that she is doing well and that Uncle Husband is her protector. Lakshmi is a young girl who trusts those who are simply nice to her when she should not.
For example, harming another person can lead to self-harm as demonstrated by Lakshmi. Mumtaz told Lakshmi that she’s either going to give herself away or she’s going to starve herself. Lakshmi would rather starve than engage in acts of prostitution (McCormick 19). Lakshmi’s response to Mumtaz’s threats result in Mumtaz losing money and harming her own pocketbook.
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Review your essay. What went right? What went wrong? Copy down feedback notes.
Begin copying essay in notebook. Revise as you copy.
Wednesday 1/8/19 – NO LATEWORK ACCEPTED AFTER THIS DAY
Complete writing your essay down in your notebook. As stated all week, you will no longer have access to your online version. Ensure you have written down your entire essay.
You need highlighters.
Pink: Topic Sentence
Other Color: Commentary
Give essay to a person you trust. No, you may NOT keep your own.
They will use a check list to give feedback on what should be a somewhat revised version of your essay.
Begin final revision of essay. Handwrite.
Bring something SILENT to do if you finish early. With scores the way they are, you should not be finishing super early.
Review as a class for finals
You will be allowed ONE page of notes, on ONE side, for your final. This will be mostly a skills based final.
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